Notes on Smut Marathon Round Four Stories

Notes on Smut Marathon Round Four Stories

Last year I was lucky enough to reach the final of the Smut Marathon. And I say lucky enough, as the competition is not just about being the best writer. It is a marathon, and like a real marathon many things can happen along the way. So you have to be quite hardy to cross the finishing line.

This year I am a reader and voter and knowing how much I appreciated those that bothered to do that last year I am taking the task seriously.

The contestants have just completed their round four stories and I was extremely impressed by the quality of them. To do justice, the whole reading and note taking process took place over about four days. I ended up with quite a lot of notes and thought the writers may find them helpful in some small way. Rather than add them to the comments section I have written a blog post…

My first read through of the round four stories lasted a few days. I didn’t want to read them all in one session as I was concerned my mind would fatigue or wander. I made these brief notes about some of the entries. Please remember they are just my thoughts and erotica is subjective…

First Read Through

  •   2 ~ Don’t like the – “it. It” in third para – clunky.
  •   4 ~ Like it -Amusing and well written.
  •   7 ~ Like it.
  •   8 ~ Missing a full stop.
  •   9 ~ Like it.
  • 10 ~Need to re-read.
  • 11 ~Great idea – reading thoughts.
  • 15 ~Re-read.
  • 16 ~Nicely written but masturbating to her mother – no.
  • 19 ~Better if boss had come in and got on with amorous stuff too.
  • 21 ~Like it.
  • 23 ~Brave take.
  • 25 ~Like it.
  • 27 ~Read again – second one about listening to thoughts.
  • 28 ~Clunky “she’d finally gave in.”
  • 31 ~Mixed tenses & exclamation marks should be used sparingly.
  • 32 ~Not to my taste.
  • 33 ~Like it – not over written.
  • 34 ~Like this – had me – not keen on first sentence.
  • 35 ~Missed full-stop first line.
  • 36 ~Liked it – keening, good word.
  • 37 ~Good story but surely it should be – spat me out?
  • 41 ~Love it.
  • 47 ~Like it – great idea.
  • 52 ~Like the idea, could have made more from it.
  • 53 ~Loving the dialogue.
  • 54 ~Not erotic enough.

From those I took these round four stories to further investigate…

Second and Third Read Through

  •   4 ~I am a sucker for a witty story and the dialogue in this made me laugh.
  •   7 ~Very well written and nicely told – bitter sweet as it un-folds.
  •   9 ~Really like this story. Great detail without being over written.
  • 10 ~Original idea. Another bitter sweet tale. Well told.
  • 11 ~Great idea and a nice little twist – love a good twist.
  • 15 ~The writer really portrayed the urgency well in this piece.
  • 21 ~Hot scene and good character description.
  • 25 ~Fab idea but would have liked more from the main overheard conversation.
  • 27 ~Oh yes, loved how this grew in pace and the ended worked!
  • 33 ~A good entry.
  • 34 ~Good story – bit terrifying actually.
  • 36 ~A perfect eves dropping scene and well told.
  • 41 ~Extremely sensual – love the description as she undressed.
  • 47 ~This made me laugh – very original. Believable dialogue.
  • 52 ~Unique idea but I wanted more.
  • 53 ~Just fabulous dialogue.

Then I was left with six. As I already mentioned erotica is extremely subjective. So liking these more than the other entries says a lot about me. We all enjoy or get off on different themes and styles.

All six were great but obviously had to break it down further, as needed to be left with just three…

Fourth Read Through

  •   4 ~ The first paragraph sets the scene brilliantly. Vital in a short story. The dialogue is similar to a corny porn movie, which was fun – witty. I also think giving us an idea what the guys fucking may look like makes it so easy to visualise the story happening.
  • 15 ~ Again this story sets the scene nicely in the first paragraph but the use of dropped twice in the same line does not work for me. I very much enjoyed the urgency of the story.
  • 27 ~ This is a fantastic idea. Love the time the story is set in and the end just works brilliantly. I didn’t find it particularly erotic though.
  • 36 ~ How many of us have received a “handbag” call. This one is fabulous too. Sexy and nicely written. Not sure how real the dialogue sounds, but does that matter?
  • 41 ~ I loved this tale. The opening paragraph means you can smell the scene and I found the description as she undressed so sensual. Beautifully written.
  • 53 ~ This story had me in fits of laughter. The dialogue was just brilliant, in my opinion, and the writing was not over done.

After re-reading and thinking about those round four stories I decided on these three…

Voting Time

Number 4, 41 and 53.

(If I had four votes I would have chosen 36 too.)


If you want to ask me anything about my notes and your story, or indeed if I have not mentioned your entry, ask away. Here or via Twitter DM.

smut marathon round four stories
My Notes on Round Four Stories

 

This was my round four story from last year. Apart from the first round this was my lowest scoring round.

6 thoughts on “Notes on Smut Marathon Round Four Stories

  1. Girl you just missed me! Love your evaluations and soo appreciate your time in doing this!!! ??????

  2. Thank you for taking the time to properly consider your votes and feedback May. It’s interesting as a writer to see what works for one person but not at all for another – I guess the best solution is to write what you want, bearing in mind previous feedback but not fundamentally changing your style. I agree with one of your final votes!

    1. You are so right. I could not work out last year what readers were after. The only common factor was as the specs got longer the readers were voting for the entries that had a good story line not just sex. I always look for that too. And so last year I wrote what I wanted to – what I am good at – thats the best bit of advice I think 😉

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